+1
You meet all the requirements and the necessary hours. Your application could obviously be improved but after looking at all the responses, you’re constantly updating it which shows your dedication. I know your intent this time was to show more effort and I see that. I believed you tried sounding more professional but it might have not gone that way. I’m not going to comment on every little paragraph detail because I’m pretty sure I’ve seen applications with worse paragraphs get accepted.
EDIT: After looking over you last application, many people did not have any interactions with you. Try and put yourself out there more, that will for sure boost your chances! Good luck!